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always left alone
wishing i could atone
for all the silly mistakes
chided by black snakes
when everything just breaks
and falls into the abyss
of a forgotten bliss
behind closed doors
with throbbing sores
a constant reminder of
that wicked angel above
always leaving me alone
wishing i could atone
for those worthless mistakes
and she takes
every last worry
to twist them into curry
that is forced down my throat
like a nigh starved goat
ready for the slaughter
and stamped like the fodder
of rich men in business suits
who pencil their pursuits
into busy life long schedules
filled with senseless modules
knowing nothing more than
a shortened life span
of a worthless beast
used only for a feast
dressed in my heavy iron chains
moaning over my pains
always left alone
     wishing i could atone
           for all those stupid mistakes
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Author's Comments

So. There's this author/poet that I used to really adore. All of his works, even the hateful, cruel blurbs that he hides in his scraps are gorgeous. I am endlessly envious of his talent, even though I'm a little ashamed to admit it considering how harsh he's been in the past. Not the best person on the planet.

But I've said it before, and I'll say it again: I can always appreciate someone's talent, no matter what they've done.

I miss reading his more heartfelt and thought out poetry, but he only seems to work on his stories these days, and they don't catch my interest as much. So I guess this is an anonymous... err... dedication? Or something, whatever.

You're a douche, but you were my friend once, so this is for you. Not that you'll ever find it.



ps. none of this means anything, srsly.
pps. okay, i should explain more. this DOES have a meaning. it's about feeling paralyzed and incapable of making up for broken promises and to pain brought on by modern day society and the rules that have grown like weeds into our gorgeous subcultures. however, it does not pertain to me or my life. i've broken lots of promises, but i'm making up for them. slowly, but i'm doing it. so nobody should worry, kay? :heart:

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:iconbaconmoose:
Are... you talking about who I think you're talking about?

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:iconbaconmoose:
Also, despite not meaning anything I really like it. The meter is cool.

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:iconsharpie-shooter:
I assume, given the pause, that yes... I am talking about who you think I'm talking about.

I'm sorry if that upsets you. x.x

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Mm, thanks. I've always liked this kind of style in poetry. It's really edgy and catchy, I dunno. Was neat to finally do one myself, even if it was senseless from beginning to end. X3;

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It doesn't, I agree with you almost entirely. u.u So much talent wasted on a sort of 'sci-fi original series' theme... which I mean in the worst possible way. Cheap and generic and no soul.

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Yeah. The sad part is that I used to like the stories, way back in the beginning, when it was more about the characters and had depth, but now it's just... flat. Washboard-like, and grating, and not enjoyable at all.
I wish I could reach out and smack him, and make him write more poetry but I'm pretty sure the only thing that would accomplish would be another angry short story about Kale and his emotastic background. Oh well...

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XD Well I liked a lot of his older stories when they didn't have such a huge cast of such cardboard-cut-out characters.
And god I know... fuck Kale. x.x
Also, FURRIES WTF IS IT JUST ME.
He turned all weird and druid on me at some point, that was definitely the decline. And really emotastic.

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Cardboard-cut-out... XD That's a really good way to explain it, yeah.
I don't know how it went from the adorable crew he had to "LAWL LEWK NEW CHARACTUR!"
WTF TOTALLY NOT JUST YOU.
I don't have anything against furries or anything, but there is a line. A very easy to spot, thick-ass LINE. x.x

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One more thing.
You stole my signature! ><

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